(Student writing) Coincidences

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One day me and my family did go to the capital city of my country Amsterdam. We did go by car and we would park it at a village nearby. When we did arrive at the parking spot. We parked the car there. To go to the centre of the city we had to take the train. Then we did go to the canal to take a canal tour. We had a lovely trip. After we arrived back at our car we drove back to our home. When we did drive home we saw a sign of Mcdonalds. We had an discussion if we had to go there. For this time I won and we did go (CORRECT!) there. When we did arrive we try to make an order. But out of nowere we heard from the restaurant 'hi'. We saw a friend of my moms with her children. We where not the only ones that did go to Amsterdam. When we did have the canal tour they saw us in the boat. We eat and laughed about it.

 

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One day my family and I went to the capital city of my country, Amsterdam. We went by car and we parked it at a village nearby (just out of the city?). When we arrived at the parking spot we parked the car there. And from there, to go to the centre of the city we had to take the train. Then we went to the canal to take a canal tour. We had a lovely trip. After we arrived back at our car we drove back home town. When we got there we saw a Mcdonalds sign. We had a discussion about whether we ought to go there. On this occasion I won and we did go there. When we arrived we tried to make an order. But out of nowhere we heard from the somewhere in restaurant a "hi". Then we saw a friend of my mom's with her children. We were not the only ones that had gone to Amsterdam. And when we were doing the canal tour they had seen saw us in the boat. We ate together in McDonalds and laughed about it.