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My most challenging period of life so far was taking interview to get a job because process of interview was too long.
My most challenging period of life so far was taking interview to get a job because process of interview was too long.
It has the
document screening, first interview
with human resources employees, second interview
with executives, third interview
with foreign interviewer use in
English, fourth interview with a CEO
or executives, physical strength test and swimming 25 meters within 35 seconds
and the last is medical examination.
It makes me very
exhausted because it was my first time to take a job interview. However i always thought so positively, believe myself and never said to other people when i passed the each process as a superstition. In Korea, we believe when you
have good news, don't tell that. If
you tell your good news, it will be
disappeared. And i think it was
right.
Finally i got a
job as a cabin crew. It is my happy memory, i decided to quit a job because
of bad moments,though.
Corrected
The most
challenging period of life so far was taking
an interview to get a job as a cabin
crew. The process of interview was simply
too long.
It began with the
document screening, then the first interview
with human resources employees, then the
second interview with the
executives, then the third interview
in English with the foreign
interviewer, then the fourth interview
with a CEO or executives, then the
physical strength test and swimming 25 meters within 35 seconds, and the last of all
came the medical examination.
Obviously, it made me utterly exhausted because it was my first time to take a job
interview. However, I always tried to
think positively, believe in myself
and never told others when I’d passed each stage of the
process, out of superstition. In
Korea, we believe when you have good news, don't tell others. If you tell your good news, it will disappear. And I think it was right.
Finally I did get
a job as cabin crew. It is a happy memory. But you know what? I decided to quit the job in the end,
because of some bad experiences.
Original
My big challenge
has been this big trip in NZ.
When I was a university student, I had a dream to study
abroad. But I was so lazy in preparing
it, so I just nearly gave up to going.
When I was in 4th
grade, I had to start thinking
about my future.
I’d already decided
to be a recruit after graduating and
I also started looking for a job. I subsequently
got a job in a supplement company and I was going there to train for recruitment. But one day I suddenly realized that I really wanted
to go to abroad!! Because I only had one
life and If I didn’t go now, I would regret it forever. So I determined to study abroad for a year. And fortunately my parents agreed with
this idea and they encouraged me. I have to be grateful to them. After
that, I talked with my company and declined the job offer.
So far I haven’t regretted coming here and I’m really satisfied with my decision. It
was a big challenge for me but I
have done 6 months so far and I feel my English has improved a lot.
But the best thing has
been getting to know other country’s culture. It is so interesting for me.
As a result, I am happy with this challenge and proud of it.
Corrected
My big challenging
has been this big trip in NZ.
When I was a university student, I had a dream to study
abroad. But I was so lazy to prepare
it, so I just nearly gave up to going.
When I was 4th grade,
I had to start to think about my future. I
already decided to be a recruit after graduate
and I also started looking for a job. I consequently got a job in a supplement
company and I was going there to train for
recruit. But one day I suddenly realized that I really wanted to go to abroad!!
Because my life is only once and If
I didn’t go now, I would regret it ever.
So I determined to study abroad for a year.
Fortunately my parents agreed with this idea and they pushed my back. I have to appreciate them. Then I talked with my company and declined
the job.
So far I haven’t regretted to come here and I really
satisfy my decision. It was a big challenging
for me but I have done already for 6
months and I fell my English has
improved a lot. But the best thing is I can know other country’s culture. It is
so interesting for me.
As a result, I am happy with this challenging and proud of it.
Original
When I did my
motorcycle driving license it was a really tough challenge for me.
The first step: to
pass my theory exam was not very hard just time-consuming, but as soon as the
practice on the motorcycle started I became nervous and insecure about my whole
decision. I actually rode the motorcycle into bush in my third lesson while I tried to turn but I was just too
fast. After I got a little better I had to ride on the road - my horror imagination. It was not as bad
as I had imagined but I was really stiff. I needed a lot of hot baths and
relaxing time after those lessons because it was frightening but also fun and getting
better every time. I was very self-critical and my teacher tried to make me
understand that nobody starts as a professional but that practicing is
important and I am one of his students
that actually constantly improve. The only mistakes I make are silly
mistakes.
Every time I spoke to
my parents I was exaggerating about the difficulties I had and they often said
they would be alright with me giving up, but as soon as I heard that it reminded me of my childhood where I had
to quit ballet because of my asthma and school
. My motivation to see something
through I am passionate about and really want even though it is hard to
learn sometimes kept me on the track. Also
because I always do things people tell me not to do. When the final day
arrived where I had my driving test my body was like a robot, I did not make
any mistakes because the fear of failing was too big and I had the skills
despite me having a little mental
breakdown just before the test. I had a
nice lunch with my mum afterwards to celebrate the success.
Corrected
When I took my
motorcycle driving license test it
was a really tough challenge for me.
The first step was
to pass my theory exam, which was
not very hard - just time-consuming.
But as soon as the practice on the
motorcycle started I became nervous and insecure about my whole decision. I
actually rode the motorcycle into a bush
on my third lesson while taking a
turn too fast.
After I’d got a
little better I had to ride on the road - my worst nightmare. It was not as bad as I had imagined but I needed a
lot of hot baths and relaxing time after those lessons due to the stiffness it caused. It was frightening but also fun and
getting better every time. I was very self-critical and my teacher tried to
make me understand that nobody starts as a professional and that practicing was
important. The trainer told me that I was actually
one of the students that constantly
improved. The only mistakes I made
were silly mistakes.
Whenever I spoke to
my parents I’d exaggerate the
difficulties I had and they often said they would be alright with me giving up.
But as soon as I heard that I’d be reminded of my childhood where I had
to quit ballet because of my asthma and school.
So my motivation to see something I
am passionate about through, even
though it is hard sometimes, kept me on the track. Besides, I always do things people tell me not to do.
When the final day arrived where I had my driving test my
body worked like a robot. I did not make any mistakes because the fear of
failing was too great and I had the
skills despite having a little
breakdown just before the test.
I had a nice lunch with my mum afterwards to celebrate the
success.
Original
I consider, if I had to choose one
especially challenging period in my life so far it would be the first semester at university.
Although Most people are very
excited about the first day at university, for me was a the toughest day in my life. The thing was that everyone knew
each other in this place.
First of all, It
was difficult to make friends, because I am
from the other part of the city and they are
almost all from the same place, also,
school so that is the reason why they knew each other. Although I really
love my career so that I could move on and
make normally my life there.
As a result, I studied a lot every single day, I had try to
pass the important exams, but I was failing. I realized it is not for me, maybe I do not have skills enough for this. Consequently I asked the teacher what I
can do to improve ans he said is impossible, you will need to read all this book, which has maybe
200 pages, for one month more " Forget this Fernanda, that all you have to do the course next year ".
In the end, I read the biggest book and past every matter. I think
that was the most difficult and challenging in my life.
Corrected
If I had to choose one especially challenging period in my
life so far it would be my first
semester at university. Although most
people are very excited about the first day at university, for me was the toughest day of my life. The thing was,
everyone else knew each other in this place. It was difficult to make friends, because I was from the other part of the city and they were almost all from the same place
and school too. But I really loved
my career dreams so I had to move on
and make the best of my life there.
To begin with I
studied a lot every single day. I had
to pass the important exams, but I was struggling.
I started to feel it was not for me and maybe I did not have
enough talent for this. So asked the teacher what I could do to improve. He said “forget
this Fernanda – you’ll have to repeat the course again next year.”
There was a book, which had about 200 pages, that I’d have
to read in one month. In the end, I read the book and passed every subject. I
think that was the most difficult and challenging in my life.
Corrected
I think that one of the most challenging periods of my life so far would be last
year, when every aspect of my life
basically changed from one day to the next.
I used to live in an apartment in Paris with my best friend.
We were both studying in the same school and were interning at the same time.
Many of my very close friends were
also in Paris at the time. Then I graduated and finished my internship. While
some of my friends were offered jobs
at the end of their internship, I did not. My roommate didn’t either,
so she decided to leave for a gap year as an au pair in the United States. As a
result, we had to leave our apartment.
So in effect I
went from being independent, working
in a great firm and being surrounded
by friends to being back at my parents', unemployed and quite lonely. This
period was particularly hard because
despite the fact that I had always been a hard
worker and a joyful person, it felt like I’d failed to succeed at
some points and it led up to a lack of self-confidence
regarding every area of my life.
As I happened to
suddenly have a lot of free time, I
started to go the gym quite a lot. Eventually, this really helped me to get my self-esteem back and I began to feel more and more confident every day. After some time, I finally
decided to use this free time to
achieve something that I always wanted to do but had always been afraid of doing: travel abroad on my own for several months. And this is how I ended
up here in New Zealand.
Orignial
The most challenging time on my life was when I dropped out
medical school after been there
for a year and half. Everyone was
calling me doctor when I was there,
my parents, cousins and friends. I had to change my major for different
reasons. First I didn’t like it, the
other reason was I got low marks for it .
After I decided to study IT (information technology) and
dropped medical school everybody was despondent
especially my family and when people ask me about I used to feel guilty
about it. Furthermore, I didn’t find any kind of support even though it was my
decision and my future !
However, I started
new page studying what I like, which was more interesting to me than being in
medical field. Moreover, I was really good and creative at Information Security, I graduated with first class honor which was surprising.
Furthermore, I started working with huge company called Cisco when I was twenty
years old, then I got an offer from Microsoft with dubal salary When I was twenty two years old, which could be a
great proof of success, . Nowadays I’m an Security Information Specialist, also preparing my self to study master degree in Cyber Security in New Zealand.
With some Adjectives of Emotion:
The most challenging and frustrating times of my life was
when I dropped out of medical school having been there for a year and a half.
Everyone was calling me doctor when I was there - my parents, cousins and
friends. I felt nervous, guilty and regretful. But I had to change my major for
two reasons. Firstly I felt annoyed, confused and enraged whenever I studied it
and secondly I got low marks.
After I decided to study IT (information technology) and
dropped medical school everybody was despondent and confused. I wouldn't say
they were angry, just disillusioned and perplexed - especially my family - and
when people asked me about it, I used to feel ashamed. Furthermore, I didn’t
find any kind of support even though it was my decision and my future!
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My name is Hoon. I like my name and my style as I called Hoon style. When I was
young my Father always said ‘Think
everything simply’. I followed his advice and it is one of the most important my standard until
now. As a kids, Everything were really curious to me and I was have many little
adventure with my friends. Also, In
the adventure I could meet a lot of obstacles. At that every
single moment I reminded my Father’s
advice and just followed. As a result, Although I was little boy , I could
overcome all of obstacles quite well
with some injuries. Moreover when I became a 19years old, I have to
go Military Service for finished my
duty. It was quite tough time in my life. From what I know , Army required strong patient and get used to command system.
However I was not afraid about
spending my precise time in Army because at that time I was totally
easy going person who have simple
thinking.
After finished basic military training my practical military
life was started I mean it time to
start real challenging. Also everything were
different and hard to me like freshman. If I give example , such as do something without my
motivation. It was worst thing to me.
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My name is Hoon. I like my name and my style, which I call “Hoon” style. When I was
young my father always said ‘Think about
everything as simply as you can’. I followed his advice and it is my
standard way of dealing with any problem.
As a kid, everything was really curious to me and
I had many little adventures with my friends. During these adventures I met a lot of obstacles.
And at each point I’d be reminded of my father’s simple
advice and just follow it. As a
result, although I was little boy, I
was able to overcome all sorts of
obstacles quite well, though with some injuries.
When I turned a 19 I
had to do Military Service. It was
quite a tough time in my life. The
army required inner strength, patience
and obedience. But I was not afraid of
spending my precious time in army because at that time I was easy
going and I had the simple thinking attitude my father had taught me.
Original
The toughest time I’ve ever had was definitely when I had to
write my first big assignment. Although I’ve
started really early with the writing part, I totally underrated all the required research. In order to fully understand autism I had to read many books so that
I could observe the behavior of the little child. There were many moments when
I was unable to cope with all the given
information. However I had a deadline and my mentor kept pushing me to
achieve my goal. Eventually I found my motivation again, due to the big improvements of the little boy. His achievements
have made me believe in myself and once my assignment was finished, I was
filled with pride because I could document his big personal development.
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The toughest time I’ve ever had was definitely when I had to
write my first big assignment when I was
studying autism. Although I’d
started with the writing part really
early, I totally underestimated
all the required research. In order to fully understand autism I had to read many books so that I could observe the
behavior of a little child. There
were many moments when I was unable to cope with all the information given. However, I had a deadline and my mentor kept
pushing me to achieve my goal. Eventually I found my motivation again, thanks to the big improvements in the little boy. His achievements made me believe in myself and once my
assignment was finished, I was filled with pride because I could document his
big personal development.
Original
The most challenging time I’ve ever had was certainly last
year. Indeed, after that I had
graduated from the university I decided that it was the time for me to pass the
big test which allows access to the lawyer
school.
I knew that I will
devote myself to my revision for four long months and my parents put on my shoulders an enormous pressure.
So that, I really wanted to carry
off this test and made them proud of
me. My psychological state during the revision was really bad because of my
pessimism. Moreover, I was the only person in my group of friends who past the test. It’s
certainly why I felt so alone while this period.
Although this
feeling I decided that I had a strong will to succeed in this experience. I
started to study hard and tried to don’t
think about the pressure so that I said to me
“if you failed it is ok but if you
don’t want have any regrets about that you have to work now”.
Finally, I passed the test and it was finally a success. Despite my fear, I didn’t give up and today I’m
really happy about that because if I
didn’t past the test last year I will not be in Auckland today.
Corrected
The most challenging time I’ve ever had was certainly last
year. After I had graduated from the university I decided that it was the time
for me to sit the big test which
allows access to the law school.
I knew that I would
devote myself to my revision for four long months and my parents put an enormous pressure on my shoulders.
I really wanted to carry off this test and make
them proud of me. My psychological state during the revision was really bad
because of my pessimism about it all.
Moreover, I was the only person in my group of friends who was sitting the test. That’s
certainly why I felt so alone during
this period.
Despite this
feeling I decided that I had a strong will to succeed in this endeavour. I started to study hard and
tried not to think about the
pressure. I said to myself “if you
fail it is okay, but if you don’t
want have any regrets about that you have to work now”.
Finally, I passed the test and it was a success. Despite my
fear, I didn’t give up and today I’m really happy about that because if I hadn’t passed
the test last year I would not be in
Auckland today.
Corrected
I would say the most challenging period in my life was when
I took part in Taste of Japan. This was a festival where people experienced
Japanese culture and traditions. I thought it would be a good opportunity to
make use of my English, and I also joined
to support the Japanese performers (who played bamboo flute). They could not
speak English at all, so I needed to interpret for audiences before they
played.
I had thought they would make a script which had what they
wanted to say. But they didn’t.
What’s more, they said “we want you to translate what we are saying from Japanese
into English and we will decide it on the spot as soon as we stand in a stage.”
I was really upset and nervous because I found this job was much more difficult
and challenging than I’d anticipated.
I got the program only fifteen
minutes before they performed and there was
not enough time to collect information about each piece.
Not surprisingly,
my first interpretation resulted in complete
failure and I lost confidence in my English. I mumbled and used a lot
of fillers and the audience could tell
I was nervous.
Fortunately, the performers told me they were going to have
same programs and there was enough time before the second and third show started. That way I was able to predict what they were going to say. I summarized
the backgrounds of each song and practiced what I would do on the stage.
The second interpretation went better and the third one was even better and I regained confidence.
This was a great memory and experience, but to tell the truth, I don’t want to repeat it.
Original
The most challenging period in my life was when I had that
quit my the school where I worked for five years and decide come to New
Zealand for study English and live a
new experience far away of my parents.
Firstly it was a really hard challenge because I used to
live with my parents and in addition to I am only child. Secondly the job that
I left was my first job after University for this reason had a special
importance for me. Finally I think that the way how I managed the situation was trying every time to move on,
getting the best of this new experience, learning more about myself and
understanding that the life is made
of big changes.
In conclusion I think that was a great experience in my life, if need quit another job in the
future for follow my dreams and being happy out site of my comfort zone, I will
be happy of do it again.
Corrected
The most challenging period in my life was when I had that
quit the school where I worked for
five years and decide come to New Zealand to
study English and have a new
experience far away of my parents.
Firstly it was a really hard challenge because I was used to living with my parents and
in addition to that, I am an only child. Secondly, the job that I left was my first job after University and for this reason had a special
importance for me.
I think that the way I managed the challenge was trying
every time to move on, getting the best of this new experience, learning more
about myself and understanding that life is made of big changes.*
(*This is a good sentence, very English!)
I think that was a great experience in my life. And if I ever need quit another
job in the future to follow my
dreams and be happy outside of my
comfort zone, I will be happy of do it again.*
(*Another very authentic sentence – great work)
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I think that one of the most challenging setbacks that I
have had to overcome was when I had to stop playing tennis because of my right
foot injury. I was about fourteen years old and I fell down the stairs at
school. I thought I was fine and I didn't go to the doctor. That day, my foot wouldn't stop hurting, so that was the moment when I finally
decided to go to the doctor. Afterwards, she told me I had suffered a sprain
and I really needed to get to the hospital just to make sure I hadn't fractured
a ligament. I went to the hospital, and two hours later the doctor told my dad
that my ligament was nearly broken but thankfully it wasn't, so I would need to
wear a boot for a month and afterwards go to physio. He also told my dad that I
couldn't train for at least two months,
that ligaments are difficult to mend.
After those two horrible months of barely having the capacity
to walk, I went back to the doctor hoping that I was fine, but I didn't pass
the resistance test, so I needed more time in physio. I spent almost four
months without training and it was really hard no to do something productive, something that I really loved.
Anyway, after that time, I went back to the tennis court happier than ever.
Original
Few years ago, I
was part of a musical band as an accordionist and we used to play on week-ends
in concerts or traditional dances. One day, a famous traditional band offered
us the chance to play on the first part of their concert. It was a great
opportunity and we had a much bigger audience than usual. As the stage had to
be prepared for the band, we had to sit on the edge of the stage to play our
music.
I was wearing a long skirt, and as a result, when I picked
up myself after playing, I stepped on my skirt and stumbled, falling down on
the audience. I was so ashamed and I swore that I would never play on a stage
again.
In my music school, everybody reminded me of the accident
and laughed. I stayed a long time without playing in my band. Fortunately, the
members of my band helped me feel better and encourage me and I consequently played again few times after.
Now it makes me laugh but in that time, I was really mortified.
Corrected
A few years ago I
was part of a musical band as an accordionist and we used to play on weekends
in concerts or traditional dances. One day, a famous traditional band offered
us the chance to play on the first part of their concert. It was a great
opportunity and we had a much bigger audience than usual.
As the stage had to be prepared for the band, we had to sit
on the edge of the stage to play our music. I was wearing a long skirt, and as
a result, when I picked up myself after playing, I stepped on my skirt and
stumbled, falling down on the audience. I was so ashamed and I swore that I
would never play on a stage again.
In my music school everybody reminded me of the accident and
laughed. I stayed a long time without playing. Fortunately, the members of my
band helped me feel better and encouraged
me and I eventually got playing again again.
Now it makes me laugh, but at the time I was really mortified.
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