IELTS Writing task 1 feedback

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1. The table provides information about most enjoyed sports by Americans from 1937 to 2008.

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2. One of the most popular one overtime is football, while baseball marked at the top in the first 40 years.

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3. The number of the rate in football has rose gradually 23% in 1937 to 41% in 2008.

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4. Overall, while football has been rose gradually overtime, the others have become less popular or remained flat at the low number in general.

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5. Basketball, Auto racing and ice skating they are quite similar for each other because their started with low scores, but they rose gradually until the end their will slightly decrease.

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6. It became the most enjoyed sport in 1972 that passed baseball, which met gradually fell from 14% to 10% during the seven decades.

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1. Improved:
   The table _________ the most popular sports _______ Americans between 1937 and 2008.

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2. Improved:
   Football is ________ one of the most popular sports, ________ baseball ________ first during the first four decades.

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3. Improved:
   The percentage of people who preferred football ________ gradually from 23% in 1937 to 41% in 2008.

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4. Improved:
   Overall, while the popularity of football increased _______ over time, the other sports ______ declined or remained at relatively low levels.

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5. Improved:
   Basketball, auto racing, and ice skating followed similar trends, ________ they ________ started with low percentages, increased gradually, and then showed a slight decline toward the end of the period.

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6. Improved:
   Football became the most popular sport in 1972 ________ overtaking baseball, _______ popularity gradually fell from 14% to 10% _______ the seven decades.