Draft:
The highest place I’ve ever been:
The highest place I’ve
ever been was the mountain of Uritorco; it’s situating (WF) in Valle De Punilla, Córdoba,
Argentina. I had been (WF)
with my father,
(P) we both like mountain climbing, so we decided to go because
people says
(WF) that to (WW)
this mountain is where the OVNIS
(WW) reach (WW), so
we felt interested (P) and
also because it was a challenge for us. The (Sp) also called
it “Cerro de los loros” has an altitude 1949 meters (6394 pies), being one of
the highest of Córdoba. You can reach to (XW) the top in one day, so you don’t need
a lot of equipment, only a lot of water and something to eat. Otherwise (WW) it’s
a great experience to be in contact with the nature and also you can see the
most beautiful scenery of Córdoba.
Benjamin Chino.
Corrected:
The Highest Place I’ve Ever Been
The highest place I’ve ever been
was the mountain of Uritorco. It’s situated in Valle De Punilla, Córdoba,
Argentina. I went there with my father. We both like mountain climbing, so we
decided to go because people say that this mountain is where UFOs have been
sighted, so we felt curious and also because it would be a challenge for us.
(Write another paragraph here
developing the points in paragraph one - did you see any UFO's? What else
happened?)
The mountain, also known as “Cerro
de los Loros” has an altitude 1949 meters, being one of the highest of Córdoba.
You can reach the top in one day, so you don’t need a lot of equipment, only
enough water and food.
(Add something more personal to
this paragraph)
Overall, it’s a great experience
to get in touch with nature and also see the most beautiful scenery of Córdoba.
(Add a more personal reflection
to the end of the piece)
- Benjamin Chino (B1.3)
Draft:
The highest place I’ve ever been:
The highest place I’ve ever been was the mountain of Uritorco; it’s situating in Valle De Punilla, Córdoba, Argentina. I had been with my father, we both like mountain climbing, so we decided to go because people says that to this mountain is where the OVNIS reach, so we felt interested and also because it was a challenge for us. The also called it “Cerro de los loros” has an altitude 1949 meters (6394 pies), being one of the highest of Córdoba. You can reach to the top in one day, so you don’t need a lot of equipment, only a lot of water and something to eat. Otherwise it’s a great experience to be in contact with the nature and also you can see the most beautiful scenery of Córdoba.
Benjamin Chino.
Corrected:
The Highest Place I’ve Ever Been
The highest place I’ve ever been was the mountain of Uritorco. It’s situated in Valle De Punilla, Córdoba, Argentina. I went there with my father. We both like mountain climbing, so we decided to go because people say that this mountain is where UFOs have been sighted, so we felt curious and also because it would be a challenge for us.
(Write another paragraph here developing the points in paragraph one - did you see any UFO's? What else happened?)
The mountain, also known as “Cerro de los Loros” has an altitude 1949 meters, being one of the highest of Córdoba. You can reach the top in one day, so you don’t need a lot of equipment, only enough water and food.
(Add something more personal to this paragraph)
Overall, it’s a great experience to get in tough with nature and also see the most beautiful scenery of Córdoba.
(Add a more personal reflection to the end of the piece)
- Benjamin Chino (B1.3)
The highest place you've ever been
Where was it? Lake Karakul, Pamir Mountains
Why did you go there? Travelling the Old Silk
Route
Who did you go with? My Scottish GF Cara
What happened when you were there? We saw yaks!
Eagles! lots of beautiful clouds
What was the weather like? Perfect – still and
clear
What was the view like? – stunning – amazing rich
colours
How did you get back down? We took a really
creaky old bus full of Pakistani men
What was the most memorable thing about the
experience? The sound of the frozen lake at night
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